Writing Exercise – Short Story Start
Posted by Author on May 18th, 2010 filed in One Shot1 Comment »
So, after reading some blogs by other aspiring writers, I’ve noticed a trend to post up snippets of stuff in progress and I thought to myself ”self, you should do that too.” So here we go. This is a story start I wrote up at 35,000 feet while flying home. I wrote it without pausing over about 15 minutes. No edits, no rewrites, no touch-ups. This is what my storytelling drafts look like:
The city was huge beyond any reasonable way to describe it. As far as she could see in any direction there were palaces and tenements, guildhalls and gardens, roads and parks, squares and plazas. In the far distance she could just see the boundary wall of her home duchy, and on every side there were duchies as large as hers. From on top of the temple bell-tower she could just see the edge of the next layer above her own, and on a perfectly clear day, you could see the floating islands that spiraled up the column of the Sun Tower where the light of day was lit each morning in its crystal lantern, and where every night the day’s white embers were banked and tended in the glass cauldron of the moon.
With her back to the Sun Tower, at the moment that morning was lit, out beyond the furthest glimpses of the furthest boundary walls, she could just make out the pink and rosy reflections on the face of the outer wall itself. At least, that’s what she told herself.
She wondered how long it would take to walk there. If she could see it, surely she could get there in a matter of days on nothing more extravagant than her own two feet. As children, they’d played and pretended to be great explorers like Tumblejack the wandering mechanical jester, or Brecka Bright the phoenix girl who saved the city when the dayfire wouldn’t light. So many stories and songs about the city, she could barely remember them all. In fact, what was odd was that she could barely remember any.
Across the City we shall go,
Travel high and travel low,
Never shall we find an end,
Where we left we come again.That was all she could remember hearing children sing. She couldn’t even remember singing it herself, just hearing it chanted by the little ones running between vendor stalls in the market square.
What was funny, was when I scrolled back up on my netbook, the lady sitting next to me said “I’d rather hear the story about Tumblejack or the phoenix girl” so I guess there’s just no chance I’ll write something that someone wants to read on the first try.
An evening with The Somnambulist
Posted by Author on May 4th, 2010 filed in Blog, Review2 Comments »
I have many passions in my life. Most of them relatively simple: a fine scotch with a few drops of water to loosen the spirit’s body and nose, fine cigars with full flavor and a mild finish, my pipe and the “Holms III” tobacco blend devised by my favorite tobacconist, and books.
My passion for books is not simple…I love books.
Little books that hardly trifle the mind and are consumed like candy; Heavy books that draw you down into the deep places of the heart and soul; Surprising books that seem to be one thing and achieve loftier things all together before they finish. I love old books. I love old styles of storytelling. I love things that revel in the best parts of past times, and the worst parts of the past peoples that breathe life into the pages. And I love the fantastic; the “beyond the horizon”, “over the edge”, “the stuff of dreams and nightmares” kind of fantastic.
I’ve felt frustrated recently, that the last crop of fantastic fiction stood on the promises of prior works and forms and did very little to actually find a new voice. While there have been many exceptions (like Gaiman and De Lint and Valente), there seems to have been an overall dearth of voices with something new to say. While there is nothing wrong with revisiting proven styles, and capitalizing on well worn (and obviously popular) paths, there was something wearisome in the last crop of stories being offered.
“Oh, look, another vampire novel. I wonder if that one features ghosts…why yes, yes it does. Not-Quite-Buffy the Secret Agent/Super Hero/Vampire Slayer meets the-dark-and-brooding-embodiment-of-angst-who-might-be-but-isn’t-really-evil. Again.”
If you’re going to create something new from the old, at least try to make something compelling.
Which brings me to my most recent read, less than an hour from my fingers; I have just closed the cover on Johnathan Barnes “The Somnambulist” and I find myself delightfully conflicted.
Either this book is the single best expansion of a genre by parody of, tweaking, teasing and generally robbing wholesale from that genre with the delighted earnestness of a child turned loose in a chocolate factory…
…or it was the worst Frankenstein’s monster of stitched together plagiarism ever perpetrated on the literary world at large.
The fact that it leaves that question in doubt is probably a testament to the sheer power and quality of the book as a whole, and of Mr. Barnes as an author.
Also, I assure you the entire “Frankenstein’s Monster” allusion is a compliment.
As a lover of Victoriana in almost all of its forms, and especially its literature, this book held the promise of swimming, no drowning, in a celebration of the delights of fiction from the 19th century. From Conan Doyle to Dickens, Poe to Prescott, and From Shelly (Mary) to…well…Shelly (Byce Percy), this book covers an almost impossibly wide spectrum.
Almost every element of this novel is taken from somewhere else. If you’ve read the fiction that it idolizes, then you’ve likely read EVERY SINGLE SENTINCE in this book before. Not in this order, perhaps not with these exact spellings…but at its core it is the literary embodiment of Mary Shelly’s titular protagonist: It is hulking, brooding, made of dead things, easily misunderstood, and with a pure heart and a wonderfully unusual execution.
It begins with a self effacing authorial note, a declaration that the narrator is unapologetically unreliable, and then introduces a set of characters stolen IN WHOLE from the most famous stories in its genre’s heyday. The protagonist, one Edward Moon, is less a homage to Edwin Drood and more a repurposing of him for a new tale. The titular character is lifted directly, name and all, from “The Cabinet of Dr. Cagliari” and even the minor character of “Mina the bearded whore” is clearly drawn from the sideshow freaks popular in 19th century traveling shows (and the fiction written about them).
Mina, like every character presented in the first two thirds of the book, is a bit of a nesting box puzzle. She’s a complexly rendered character who is both sympathetic and villainous without being something so cardboard as “merely evil” in the typical sense, nor is she a sympathetic damsel-in-distress female archetype ether. Like so many things in this book, she is a disconcerting mixture of both.
And this is where the narrative device will get you, as the narrator is professedly unreliable from the beginning with an abject hatred of the hero; you never really know what parts of the story are intentionally misrepresented to present the hero in the worst possible light. Nothing here is cut-and-dried, nothing is easy to follow. Yet, the book is as engaging and involving as anything I’ve read in ages.
Because the book makes no attempt to paint the hero or his companions in a positive light (and in fact goes to great lengths to convince you that everyone is equally undesirable and driven by unsound motives) you often get conflicting pictures of the characters and their actions from chapter to chapter.
The whole literary device is built up and suspended like a masterful house of cards right up until the final sequence plays out. The close of the book is a kinetic, chaotic, confusing sequence of catastrophes and cataclysms that play out in Victorian London in a sequence of events that you can’t trust the narrator to render in either proper order or even with functional descriptions.
Much of the resolution point of the story is revealed as a fait accompli catalyzed by a pair of deus ex machina (dis ex machina?) who’s motivations are so poorly defined that they undermine the already unhinged narrator beyond any hope of even minute believability.
Which might well be the point of the whole work, that chaos begats chaos, and that as our society becomes more and more inclusive and chaotic and dependant on things beyond our individual control, society itself becomes the monster.
Or…Johnathan Barnes has completely lost his ever loving mind and let Rhesus Monkeys on crack write the last chapters while blindfolded, dictating the whole thing to a text-to-speech system with the language recognition system set for “Ugaritic” instead of “English” (or even “Monkey” for that matter).
The ultimate question is “did I like it?” And the answer is “no.”
On the one hand I loved it. It was challenging and yet compellingly readable. Great characters, a wonderful literary device, and overall execution of both “a book” and “a story” that was excellent on multiple levels.
On the other hand, I’d have a hard time recommending it to anyone. The content is so genre specific, if you don’t love the source material, you won’t enjoy the resulting effort. Also, the ending is a challenge. It challenges logic, patience, and one’s ability to afford an author the privilege of telling his story in his own way.
This was an experience where I got to the end and immediately had to ask myself “what in the ever-loving-FUCK was that?!?” Not a negative thing by any stretch, but not something that can easily be recommended to someone else either.
For myself, it was wonderful and I’ll read it again; and I look forward to Johnathan Barnes next book with great anticipation. For anyone else, I simply invite you to read at your own risk.
This is a new thing made from old things, and a complex thing made from simple parts. It has a heart and a soul, but like so many delicate things, it meets its end in a disturbing, sudden, and somewhat difficult way.
NaNoWriMo – Day one: laughable at best.
Posted by Author on November 2nd, 2009 filed in BlogComment now »
So the prevailing wisdom is that NaNoWriMo success is best accomplished with a bold and furious start to impel one down a path of writing frenzy and consistent output. Firing the laptop up at midnight after the trick-or-treat-ers are safely home and in bed, yanking out one’s outline and prep notes, and dashing off a few thousand words over the course of the first day of NaNoWriMo.
You know, something to get the juices flowing. Something to BUILD on.
Yeah.
My day one word count was 50. Including title and the ever-so-narrative “Chapter 1” on it’s own line. A grand total of two sentences. Oh yeah! Who rocks? I rock!
Want to see what a horrible NaNoWriMo start looks like? Here you go:
Beyond the Grip of Terra
Chapter 1
The gas-lamps were just beginning to light in the gathering dusk as the carriages rolled down the long drive to the manor house’s imposing south entrance. Footmen in tails, top hats, and gloves opened the doors and helped the occupants climb down from the coaches.
Yeah. Not even GOOD sentences.
Editorial Notes as follows:
1) Title, not likely to actually be “Beyond the Grip of Terra” when all is said and done.
2) That fist sentence is clumsy and overwrought. Which, given that it’s a first sentence, is an almost forgone conclusion.
3) That second sentence sucks even more. Footmen in full livery don’t wear top hats. Also, the flow of action is a tad confused. While I want the implied “obviously the carriages stopped before they opened the doors” I might need to clarify that a touch.
Yep. That’s my writing process in a nutshell. Bad starts and continuous edits. Rinse and repeat.
You’ve got to spend money to make money.
Posted by Author on November 1st, 2009 filed in BlogComment now »
Three Hundred Dollars. Three HUNDRED Dollars. THREE HUNDRED DOLLARS!!!
[cue loud explosion and the sound of wet flesh splattering on the ground.]
That “bang and plop” you just heard was my brain. The three hundred dollars was the new ultra-portable netbook with full-sized keyboard I just bought.
I keep trying to tell myself that this is “an investment” but I’m having a hard time balancing “investment” against “frivolous indulgence” and I guess in some ways I’m just not quite prepared to win that battle in my head yet.
The only way to justify it to myself is to USE it. If it increases my output, it was worth the money; if it ends up being the writing equivalent of the treadmill in the corner with my clothes hanging on it, then not so much.
As for “using it” I guess the proof needs to be in the measurable output; and this is the month for measurable output. As some of you know, November is NaNoWriMo month, and as such, I will be participating this year. Of course, 50,000 words is barely the first third of my outline estimate, so we’ll see how this goes. I’ll be posting here as close to every day as possible, and I’ll be trying to get some consistent posting frequency going on MyBadPants.com as well…so here’s to hoping this new creation tool will actually help me find opportunities to create!
Stay tuned for more stories from the front lines of NaNoWriMo, some excerpts and example chapters, and then follow along as I decide where to go with this manuscript when it’s finished (even if that’s not in line with the NaNoWriMo end date).
Hopefully this will be interesting, or at least creative.
The single best source of advice. Ever.
Posted by Author on January 6th, 2009 filed in Blog, ReviewComment now »
There are literally thousands of places on the internet where you can read advice on breaking into the publishing industry. While I’m sure that many of these are wonderful (and more than half of them are just trying to scam you out of money), I honestly believe that there is absolutely NO better source of insight than the posts and comments over at Making Light.
Long ago and far away, I was a regular reader and poster to the rec.arts.sf.written.robert-jordan newsgroup. Of all the people who participated there, none were more insightful than TNH and PNH; mysterious acronyms who seemed to have some kind of inside scoop on the goings-on happening behind closed doors at Tor Books, Robert Jordan’s publisher.
Soon it was revealed (or at least publicized more widely) that TNH and PNH were known in the “real world” as Patrick and Teresa Nielsen Hayden (yes, their name is double unhyphenated, and if you want to understand that better please read more about it here).
Patrick and Teresa are MAJOR names in the SF-F publishing world. Patrick is a Hugo Award wining editor for Tor, and Teresa is a sort of editor-at-large for Tor who seems to operate on a slightly more freelance basis…from her office…in the Flatiron Building…with the rest of the Tor employees…so…yeah. I don’t really get how that works either. Anyway, they are both inextricably linked with Tor publishing. Patrick seems to edit more “hard SF” stuff and Teresa edits more “fantasy” related material; although there are many MANY exceptions to that little rule-of-thumb, and they both have incredible relationships with MANY major names in publishing on both sides of the table.
Together they represent well more than half a century of publishing experiance, writer education, fanzine publishing, and just general love of the SF-F genre and tireless work furthering the genre’s exposure to more and more fans.
Did I mention that they’re really nice people? It’s always easier to take really tough advice from nice people, and they are really good at dishing out the really tough advice.
Years ago, they each had individual weblogs up and running before weblogs were the cool thing to do(tm). A few years later they consolidated their individual blogs into the new and improved (and quite possibly all powerful) Making Light.
Lots and lots of different things pass across the front page of Making Light. You want politics? Making Light has got you covered. Want to know everything there is to know about emergency response best practices? They’ve got you covered. Want a collection of the funniest and/or weirdest links EVER? Making Light’s particles have TOTALLY got you covered.
But, at the end of the day, the best posts and comment threads are the ones that touch on the actual industry of publishing. For your reading pleasure, and industry elucidation, I direct you to the post entitled “Slushkiller” and the incredible trove of knowledge encapsulated therein.
Yes, the post is a long one. Yes, there are more than 700 comments. Yes, there’s more industry knowledge contained in that one page than some people can get in YEARS of college and industry employment. Take a quick scan of the names in the comments section…yes, that John Scalzi…yes, THAT Elizabeth Bear…YES, THAT Jo Walton. And yes, that REALLY IS Niel Gaiman.
Additional names that might not ring a bell but are of note none the less:
Melissa Singer - Prominent Editor.
Beth Mecham - Prominent Editor.
Charlie Stross - Author.
Jim McDonnald - Author and prominent member of the SFWA.
John M Ford – Author, Poetic Genius, Man of Great Thoughts; and a man sadly missed.
I can assure you that there are several (dozen?) other names that are notable that I just haven’t made the mental connection with while writing this post. Off the top of my head there’s about a half-dozen Hugo/John W. Campbell/Locust/Mythopoetic awards involved in the conversation. There are major international conventions that can’t put together a panel with that many notables discussing the basics of “getting published” in the industry today.
Everything starts with a discussion of rejection letters. More specifically, the nature of author reactions to rejection letters. Which leads to a discussion of the whys of rejection letters, which leads to a truly wonderful discussion of what editors are looking for that will climb off of the slushpile and into the ranks of the published.
I should make a confession here, due to truly random and fortunate circumstances I have never received a rejection letter. Yet.
My submissions so far have resulted in publications, the few that I have. I don’t really think this means anything other than I haven’t submitted very much. I anticipate rejections by the metric ton. Not because I think poorly of my writing, but because I recognize that first, more material is rejected than published; and (almost by direct corollary) second, even otherwise publishable material might not fit the buying needs of the editor it was submitted to.
Publishing is a business. It exists to make money for a few people by getting (hopefully) many people to pay their own hard earned money for publications containing the writings of authors paid a percentage of the anticipated money up front. Publishers make money by finding material that the maximum number of people want to pay money for. It doesn’t matter if you write the most unusual, innovative, unexpected or avant-guard string of words ever produced if publishers can’t reliably take a risk on it. And let’s be clear, all publishing is a risk. What might seem like a bestseller-in-waiting may never find an audiance. What might seem like a concept destined to reach two people and thier cat could end up being the next Harry Potter. Publishers are always taking a risk. Publishers hire editors to find and develop authors that can write books/magazines/whatever that will actually SELL to people with money.
(Editors develop relationships with agents who are also in the business of finding and representing authors, but that is a whole different ball game that I will save for a future post).
An editor’s job isn’t easy by ANY stretch of the imagination. Many thousands of people every year want to be writers. Only a tiny fraction of those people write well enough for publishers to be able to sell thier writing to others. Of that tiny fraction, there is the incredible difficulty in matching the right story to the right publisher. The job of matching those two falls to the editor. Sometimes the right book will go to the wrong publisher, and get rejected. Sometimes the wrong book from the right writer will cross the desk of an editor at the right publisher, and it too will be rejected. Rejection happens. A lot.
Imagine if you will, what happens when a perfectly good short story crosses the desk of an editor at a major mothly magazine. Imagine that the story features aliens meeting Santa Claus on Christmas Eve. It’s funny, it’s engaging, it’s PERFECT for the winter double issue. Unfortunately, the editor just closed the book on this year’s winter double issue last week and he already bought a story with aliens and another story featuring Santa vs. an autonomous stealth fighter. There simply isn’t any room for this perfectly good story.
But the editor takes it upon himself to send a personal rejection letter explaining that there’s no place for this particular story, praising the merits of the story and encouraging the author to submit it to other markets, AND indicating that he’d like to see something else from the author.
As a writer, I can assure you that I would LOVE to get a rejection letter like that. Unfortunately, there are countless many writers out there who would take that letter as a devastatingly personal blow. See the Slushkiller post for the sad proof.
For those writers, it has stopped being a business; it has become a calling. In the last few years, I can’t tell you how many people I’ve met who honestly believe that there is simply NO ONE in the universe qualified to “judge” their immaculate conceptions. Not their friends and peers, not money grubbing agents, and certainly not some ivory tower ensconced editor who thinks they can dictate the value of ART from on high.
If you think professional writing is anything other than performing a job for a business, you are barking mad. When you want to write “for pay” you need to realize that someone else is writing the check. Quite simply, that means that you are performing a job. You are not, in fact, providing a service to posterity. When you have a job, you have a boss; when you have a boss, you should listen to them. Generally, they’re the boss for a reason.
Slushkiller pretty much explains the entire editor perspective in detail from some of the most powerful editors in the SF-F publishing world. Oh, and did I mention that they’re all really nice people?
If you have ANY desire to write SF-F, or even just a desire to understand the publishing industry better, I can’t recommend Making Light enough. There really isn’t anything else like it.
New Year, New Projects
Posted by Author on January 1st, 2009 filed in Blog, PersonalComment now »
Well, it’s been more than a year since I hopped on the blogging bandwagon. Some experiments went well, some not-so-much, and some were dead before even getting off the ground. I noticed something as I went along, blogs that are great for writing personal “slice of life” vignettes aren’t really the best venue for more structured fiction.
In this new year, I would like to focus more on my writing-for-money, and less on miscellaneous moments from my personal life. I want to talk about the process of writing as a profession, about the industry of publishing, and about the best-of-the-best of the people who have already “made it” from aspiring writer to published author.
So, on this site I’ll post everything from first drafts to final submissions. I’ll talk about cover letters, questing through the dark forest of the lost looking for an agent, climbing the mountain of quicksand that is the dreaded “slushpile” of un-agented submissions, and all the tilting at windmills disguised as short story submissions. I’ll post my rejection letters (and there WILL be rejection letters), helpful comments I might receive along the way, and any successes for all to see.
If you’ve ever wanted to watch someone go the distance and try to make their dreams come true, then stay tuned. I can’t promise that I’ll end up a best selling author; but I CAN promise that I’ll wring all the gut-wrenching humor out of the attempt for all to see.